Robert Monroe Posted October 6, 2012 Author Share Posted October 6, 2012 Actually, a rank of 7 doesn't require IC justification, but cool! ALSO YOU NEED TO POST SKILLS FROM THE SKILL LIST HGGGGN Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hidi Posted October 8, 2012 Share Posted October 8, 2012 Robert, I edited my initial post. Also, my friend Breeze (New SF-O member) May be interested in entering the RP. Would it be ok if she used one of my characters? There's no guarantee she'll even post here either. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gene Inari Posted October 8, 2012 Share Posted October 8, 2012 Hidi! Your character needs actual skills from the template! Those! You have a maximum of 6 to take (though you don't need to take all 6). Hidi, you're only allowed to pick 6 or fewer skills that your character is explicitly good at. Feel free to give justifications as to why your character has those skills, but it still has to be six from the list. Use Rob's profile sheet as a guide both for how to format it and what content it should have. If it doesn't look like Rob's sheet, then something isn't being done right. There's a reason he has them posted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 8, 2012 Author Share Posted October 8, 2012 Alright you motherfuckers. Pay the FUCK attention. Did you not read my fucking thread? Look at the fucking DM Char profiles? DO YOU NOT FUCKING KNOW HOW TO DO SOMETHING AS SIMPLE AS FOLLOW GODDAMN INSTRUCTIONS because that is the feeling I am getting is that you all just saw HEY A RP THREAD HURRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR and posted some shit without giving a FUCK. You may feel I am overreacting. And I am. But it gets my point across. LOOK AT ROB'S PROFILE: Name: Robert Monroe Alias: Captain Age: 35 Sex: Male Height: 6' Weight: 200 lbs Race: Wildcat mutt Homeworld: Katina Description: Tall, muscled, well built. Has bronzed fur with tufts of blonde hair and eye splotches, and around his maw, giving the allusion of a well groomed beard. Specialization: Captain of the M.S.S., Lead Researcher of the Saurian Project (Biology) Background: Born on Katina, Robert spent much of his youth in the open outback near the Cornerian military bases, learning to shoot and fend for himself. An orphan, he was raised by the entire unit at the local base, making them something of an extended family to him. As a young adult, he got into sciences, and obtained several degrees in various studies, proving himself to be quite the Renaissance man. During the Lylat War against Andross, Robert saved many lives with his innovations in medical science, drastically reducing casualties on both sides of the conflict. Now in peacetime, he works freelance on General Pepper's personal payroll, and with the discovery of Sauria, has established the private research space station with his family. Skillset: Expert in several fields of scientific study, particularly chemistry, biology, and engineering. Designer of a multitude of devices, expert on Saurian organisms. Accomplished gunslinger and crackshot, prefers pistols. Pistols (Gunslinger), Academics (Biology, Medicine), Technology (Repair/Destroy), Shotguns STR: 7 PER: 7 CHR: 5 INT: 9 WIL: 6 AGI: 7 That is the template. You do not deviate from the template. WHY? LET'S REVIEW THE THREAD... This will be your character's profile. It will function as the in-character dossier that Robert Monroe will review when selecting his team, so write it carefully and put hard work into it! THAT'S WHY. Your profile doubles as an In-Character Dossier which Robert Monroe the character will review to see if you are fit for the mission at hand. Let's go over some personal flaws... Manthony, overall you're good, but do realize 3 Willpower doesn't just inhibit your magic powers, but means your character will be much more suspectible to mind control, fear, pain, and the like. Hidi, you just copy pasted the ENTIRE SKILLSET LIST. I told you to PICK skills. I literally said a MAXIMUM OF SIX. Also I don't give a shit if you identify as a furry or not I'm not a furry either and I run this shithole of a RP. Sroberson, while I love the detail of your profile, it needs to be streamlined to match the template. Merge clothing with appearance, streamline personality into their biography, as well as their IC justifications for their bionic upgrades. You should also list your skill masteries by their name, not just "mastery". Renardfrost, you haven't listed any skills, and there's no reason for you to list your character's flaws, unless you streamline it as their bio. Furthermore, we need to discuss the exact details of your character's magic powers via PMs before I can give you the ok. Also, keep OOC comments and smilies out of the profile. FURTHERMORE, I am generally underwhelmed by a good many of these profiles. Naza, Gene's and Russiandog's are the only ones that SEEM like serious dossiers for a SUPER ELITE MISSION. The rest don't really mention WHAT your character's area of expertise is or how they accomplished getting there, and overall a good majority of the characters are very young adults/late teenagers. I don't mind young prodigy characters, but I'm not even seeing mention of prodigy! Manthony, your profile lists skills and talents, but they're not mentioned or elaborated on in the profile. Hidi, a scout-fresh-from-training would need a good reason to be considered deployment to a sensitive area as Sauria. Furthermore, this is a mercenary job. Robert is picking out dossiers, noone is being "considered" by anything. Think of it as a job resume. AJC, your profile fails to make mention of any reason why he would be selected for this job other than OUTDOORSMAN and WANTS TO SEE SAURIA. RenardFrost, your profile's bio should elaborate more on why your character is fit for the job. Yes, he's a psychic, but so what? You gave me a backstory, but not a reason. I will be editing the template to help alleiviate these problems. In the mean time, I hope to see all of these issues addressed. ALL. OF. THEM. At the least, they barely meet my standards, and at the worst they are outright worthy of denial. Try to not take offense at my anger and see the point I'm making here. I didn't bust my balls on this premise to be short-changed here; I give you 100% effort, I expect nothing less in return. And AJC... I suggest you make EVERY post from now on in a file editor like MS Word and use the spell and grammar checker. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 8, 2012 Author Share Posted October 8, 2012 I've edited Robert and Jami's profile. Take note! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 8, 2012 Author Share Posted October 8, 2012 ALSO FORGOT TO MENTION Several of you people have less than the maximum 6 skills required. While this is perfectly good, hell, encouraged even (makes your characters more realistic!), do feel free to pad out the extra space! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hidi Posted October 8, 2012 Share Posted October 8, 2012 I'm more of a visual person, so sorry if I get words mixed up and stuff, also my concentration on reading and writing is only effective for a very short period of time. I'm gonna go tweak some stuff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thu'um Posted October 8, 2012 Share Posted October 8, 2012 ah damn, alright.... give me some time... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renardfrost Posted October 8, 2012 Share Posted October 8, 2012 Perfectly understandable... I'll get to work on it. I'm no veteran rper, but I do try my best..i'll go over the details with you in PM and try myhardest to match the template when i have the chance. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 9, 2012 Author Share Posted October 9, 2012 To keep people from dragging their feet, profiles will be due in ONE WEEK. That's October 15! After that, we are getting this fucker started!Furthermore, do not edit your old profile posts. Repost them so I can make comparisons. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hidi Posted October 9, 2012 Share Posted October 9, 2012 Umm Are you then ok with mine? I'll try and get Breeze to decide soon, then I may post again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renardfrost Posted October 9, 2012 Share Posted October 9, 2012 Name: Renard Lloyd Frost Alias: Ren Age: 19 Sex: Male Height: 6'2" Weight: 220 lbs Race: Red Fox Homeworld: Corneria Description:Orange fur with white face, torso, and tailtip and limbs that are brown past thier second joints. Dresses in the following layers. ( Excluding undergarment) 1.Red Shorts, And a sleeveless, nearly skintight blue sleeveless shirt. 2. Green, slightly baggy pants, and Zippered shirt of matching color, either short or long sleeved. 3. Either a short sleeved, white jacket that cuts off halfway down his ribs, or a longsleeved, white coat that stops just past his hips. Both hang open. 4. Lucky Blue Kerchief scarf with elongated ends that rest past his shoulderblades. Background: A Boy from Crosrhode, A small, Rural area of Corneria that is known for agriculture. Renard has has a rather tranquil early life. His parents did their job well, His mother teaching him to have the strength and manners of a country gentleman, and his father teaching him to have the smarts and cunning of a city dweller. In fact, he passed the entrance exam and entered the Corneria military academy at just 10, where tests have made perfectly clear that he was a prodigy with edged weapons, as well as select academics, all the while training and receiving encephalic implants to up his mental and nerual capacities. As a result of feeling the aftereffects of these surgeries and implants time and time again, he's developed a flatout distrust for doctors. In school, he was more of an academic than a fighter, but for some reason was incapable of piloting any motored vehicle. When asked, he claimed that it was because he couldn't focus on the controls as well as the road and his thoughts. he perfers to ride around on skates of various types, or drift around on a hoverboard. Of course, this didn't stop him from enjoying training or extreme sports like skydiving or snowboarding. After graduating, he's been taking any odd job he could find, hoping to save enough money to start his own mercinary outfit with his friends. The events concerning Sauria had piqued his interest, regarding the mission as a possible learning experience as well as a means to earn himself a fair deal of money towards his goal. Not to mention the painfully obvious facts that the Saurians need help, and that if the whole system could be in trouble, it's everyone's problem as well as thiers. Around the end of his second year in the academy his Dormant abilities had awakened during a particulary perilous training excercise. The abilities of a Soulsmith, a type of psychic warrior with rather weak mental abilities, like very weak telepathy that sounds like static, or psychokinesis that can only move stuff that he could at normal strength. A soulsmith's defining ability is "forging" blades, weapons, objects, and tools out of shimmering, glowing, translucent psionic energy called psenergy, which is literally the physical manifestation of one's mind or "soul." All living things have Psenergy, But few can control it to the degree that a soulsmith can. Renard is capable of making and using various weapons, but he perfers Daggers , Shortswords, and other small blades. any weapon he makes are as only sharp as a normal blade and they can be broken. the lethality and durability of these items influenceing and directly altered by his mental focus. Renard's psenergy, which is normally Sky blue in hue, has an interesting property of changing color in response to mood, or changing to match the psenergy color in another living thing.(Much like aura, Psenergy usually has a unique color from person to person.) He uses this property to track and locate living things and as a bit of a crutch in social situations. This of course, generally weirds out the people he "reads". The only thing it offers him now is a varied arsenal and these minor abilities... he still has to hone this power, but is having trouble since there's no one who can really teach him other than first-hand experiance since the Soulsmith Phenomena is relativley new. Needless to say, His psychic abilities still come with a couple perks, such as communicating with spirits, or picking up the occasional thought. Skillsets: A psychic, and an avid, although novice biologist. Exhibits expert-level mastery of melee weapons of varied types. Rather stubbon, and as such, an adept survivalist. Psychokenetics, Martial Arts, Melee Weapons, Academics, Survival (Adrenaline Rush) Stats Strength - 6 Perception -5 Charisma - 4 Intelligence -7 Willpower- 7 Agility - 5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 10, 2012 Author Share Posted October 10, 2012 Renardfox, you got too many skills! Maximum is 6! Robert and Jami are allowed more because they're DM characters. Perks of running the RP for you dorks. Remember that every rank of a mastery skill uses up a skill point! (So Melee weapons, Swords, and daggers are three points right there!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 10, 2012 Author Share Posted October 10, 2012 Hidi, your profile needs the editing I mentioned, I don't be denying any profiles until the 15th, so give it your best shot! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renardfrost Posted October 10, 2012 Share Posted October 10, 2012 there.. I edited rather than reposted it for something rather minor.. hopefully it matches parameters now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 10, 2012 Author Share Posted October 10, 2012 You have seven skills. Lose one! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renardfrost Posted October 10, 2012 Share Posted October 10, 2012 Alrighty.. that should do it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 10, 2012 Author Share Posted October 10, 2012 Personal beef: Your character is an accomplished sportsman, academic, and psychic... all at the age of 19. technically nothing rule breaking, but he's got some special snowflake syndrome going on there. He's very young to be so skilled at so many things, even as a prodigy. ... also, how is he skilled user of melee weapons if he spent most of his life studying academics? It does say he was a prodigy who went to an academy at age of freakin' -10-, but that's it. Elaborate more on that, take out all the shit on extreme sports and personal life shit noone cares about. This is a resume, not a documentary. Think what's important to mention to get picked for the job to Sauria, and focus writing about that. Again, look at Rob and Jami's profiles as examples. Both only mention their life achivements that are relevant to the job, not their hobbies, their marriage, or even their child.You should also describe his clothing less and his physique more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renardfrost Posted October 10, 2012 Share Posted October 10, 2012 Bah, nevermind... if you would be so kinda as to forget my involvement in this at all.. Apperantly My life has other plans for me other than to be surfing the web with regularity for quite some time... i thank you for the offers and constructive critisism, and i wish you the best with the success of this rp .I look forward to reading it, i really do. if by some miracle i do find the time or break out of my obligation early enough to meet the deadline... i'm fairly certain i can boil this down to a dossier that would satisfy you...and it's not that i mean these things to be an eyesore... i'm just a sucker for details... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 10, 2012 Author Share Posted October 10, 2012 A shame to see you have to drop out, Renard! The doors are open until the 15th if you can pull it off! And the profile isn't an "eyesore", I do love the detailed backstory, just it needs only a certain -sort- of details for the RP! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 10, 2012 Author Share Posted October 10, 2012 Hidi, please repost your edited profile! And only mention skills you have, no need to mention the ones you don't and tell me why you don't have them! And no, half points are not allowed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
russiandog38 Posted October 10, 2012 Share Posted October 10, 2012 Is there anything wrong with mine thats worth fixing? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robert Monroe Posted October 10, 2012 Author Share Posted October 10, 2012 Russiandog, your profile is technically fine, it does everything it needs. If you'd like, you can expand on it, make it more detailed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hidi Posted October 11, 2012 Share Posted October 11, 2012 Hidi, please repost your edited profile! And only mention skills you have, no need to mention the ones you don't and tell me why you don't have them! And no, half points are not allowed. Yes, yes, I'll do it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renardfrost Posted October 11, 2012 Share Posted October 11, 2012 Name: Renard Lloyd Frost Alias: Ren Age: 19 Sex: Male Height: 6'2" Weight: 220 lbs Race: Red Fox Homeworld: Corneria Description:Orange fur with white face, torso, and tailtip and limbs that are brown past thier second joints. Background: A Boy from Crosrhode, A small, Rural area of Corneria that is known for agriculture. Passed the entrance exam and entered the Corneria military academy at just 10, where he demonstrated a prodigical ability with edged weapons, and a high capacity for select academics. Although he has a rather concerning inability to drive or fly vehicles. After graduating at 18, he's been taking any odd job he could find freelancing, hoping to save enough money to start his own mercenary outfit with his friends. The events concerning Sauria had piqued his interest, regarding the mission as a means to earn himself a fair deal of money towards his goal. Around the end of his second year in the academy, he began displaying interesting abilities. The abilities of a Soulsmith, a type of psychic with rather weak mental abilities, like very weak telepathy that sounds like static, or psychokinesis that can only move stuff that he could at normal strength. A soulsmith's defining ability is "forging" blades, weapons, shields, barriers, objects, and tools out of shimmering, glowing, translucent psionic energy called psenergy, which is literally the physical manifestation of one's mind or "soul." All living things have Psenergy, But few can control it to the degree that a soulsmith can. Renard is capable of making and using various weapons, but he prefers Daggers , Shortswords, and other small blades. Any weapon he makes are as only sharp as a normal blade and they can be broken. the lethality and durability of these items influenceing and directly altered by his mental focus. Renard's psenergy, which is normally Sky blue in hue, has an interesting property of changing color in response to mood, or changing to match the psenergy color in another living thing.(Much like aura, Psenergy usually has a unique color from person to person.) He uses this property to track and locate living things and as a bit of a crutch in social situations. This of course, generally weirds out the people he "reads". Needless to say, His psychic abilities still come with a couple extra perks, such as communicating with spirits, or picking up the occasional thought. Skillsets: A psychic, and an avid, Exhibits expert-level use of melee weapons of varied types. Rather stubbon, and as such, an adept survivalist. Psychokenetics, Melee Weapons, Survival (Adrenaline Rush) Stats Strength - 6 Perception -5 Charisma - 4 Intelligence -7 Willpower- 7 Agility - 5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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