Enter Star-Blade

[Dark-Blade]

This is a Star Fox Fan Fiction of mine. It does Involve Star Fox indeed. As you can Play all the Possible members of the Star Fox Team, and the NEW Team, Star-Blade. Star-Blade is lead by a Mysterious Person named Dark-Blade. No one knows much about him, and he mainly stays to himself. He wares a Mask that Covers his entire head, Concealing his True Identity, not only that, but he also wears Medieval-Style Plate Armor, uses a Long Sword made from an Equally Mysterious ORE, called ODE (Obsidian Damascus Ebony), and if any of you Played Fable and the Elder Scrolls Games, you can tell that Obsidian (Fable), and Ebony (Elder Scrolls), are Metallic Materials used when Forging Armor and Weapons. The Damascus Ore is a Common Ore for us People. However, this ore is a Combination of the 3. It is a Nearly Indestructible ORE. He has a Plasma Magnum w/a Large Bayonet on it, and several other Features.

 

In the Multi-Player, you can Unlock Races to Play as and Edit your Character. His Race is ONE of the Unlockable Races, so is the Cerinian Race, the Cornarian, Andross' Army, the Koran Empire, and all of these Factions may have every Possible Race, the Dog, Croc, Cat, Bird, Hare, Dolphin, Orca, Shark, and so on.

 

Moving on with this Fan-Fiction Game. Players are able to Fly the Ships in any Direction. The Flying Parts of the Gameplay are leaning more towards Games that give you the Freedom to Fly where ever you wish in the Level/Map. Much like the Battlefield Series. Only in SOME of the Levels, the Original Rail Shooter Game Play comes into Play. Where Players are in a Straight Forward Run, with Enemies coming from all sides. This gives the Game that Starfox-Starfox 64 feel to it. After you Complete the Game, you can Choose a Character from the Storyline and play through the Campaign as that Character. Even through the Parts that Changes the Team Mate, or the Team completely. If you are a Fox-for-Life kind of guy, you can Play as Fox the whole game, or if you are leaning towards Falco's Style, then you can Choose Falco. However, there is also a Choice. During Gameplay, a Choice Menu will Pop up, asking "Do you wish to Play as this Character or choose the Default Character?", This Choice Menu may change the Storyline, like you go through the Starfox Point of View on things that are happening, or you can go through Star-Blade's Point of View on things that are Happening.

 

Please Note- When Playing as Krystal or Garnet, Krystal and Garnet are NOT Related. Garnet is a Red Vixen with a Black Secondary Color on her Chest, Face, and the Tip of her Tail, Yellow/Pink/White Eyes, a Tribal Tail Bracelet, a White Rose Birth Pattern on her Thighs, Long Light Pink Hair, Tri-Maria is NOT her Actual Home Planet, Crystia is, She uses a Tribal Tri-Marian Long Sword, and Dons her Tribal Outfit every once in a while. How she got entangled with Star-Blade is actually very SIMILAR to Krystal and the Star Fox Team. However, without a fully Developed Team, Star-Blade only had Dark-Blade and HK-47, and Assassin Android. Dark-Blade receives a Distress Call from the Tri-Maria Moon. The Distress Call was unknown, as the Planet was indeed ruled by the Many Tribes of the Moon. It being a Primitive, Tribal Planet, the Distress Call came from a Visitor of the Moon. Nathan Gate, the Character who sent his Distress Beacon because he was in Trouble. Nathan actually Encountered Garnet when he was Exploring an Excavated Ancient Temple, the Tri-Nayruna Temple. The Temple of the Goddess, Tri-Nayruna, the Goddess of Love, the Matron Goddess of the Tri-Marian Moon. He Persuaded Garnet to Help him Explore this Temple, when the Legend was, that the Temple was Befouled, and Tainted by the Dark Goddess. At 1 Point in the Temple, Nathan and Garnet were Locked in a Room that was then filled with the Walking Skeletons of the Cultist Tribes. Nathan sent his Distress Beacon and was Captured. Garnet was also Captured, and was Placed in the Farorian Crystal, which severed like a Prison. Very much like Krystal on Dinosaur Planet/Suaria in SF: Adventures. However, this was a Different reason. The other Ancient Legend, Tied to the Legend of how the Tri-Nayruna Temple was Desecrated and Befouled. The Legend was "The Prophecy of the Red Vixen". Garnet was indeed a Red Vixen, and was shunned by most of her Tribe because of her Red Fur Coloration, and also because of the Prophecy. Dark-Blade goes to where the Beacon was, only to find it, and Garnet's Sword on the Ground inside the Room where they were Captured. He is then attacked by the Undead, and he loses HIS Sword. Being Resourceful, he grabbed the Sword that was on the other end of the room, and found out that it had Magical Abilites. Being no Stranger to Magic, he was able to utilize it with Precision. Later, after a lot of Questing, and gathering Items, he Found his Sword, only to be wielded by the Cultist Tirbe's Chieftess. She offers him a Romantic Alternative, however, he refuses, and they Fight. He Gains his Sword back, and is then Transported into a Paranormal Realm, where the Dark Goddess of Tri-Maria Resided. She too offered a Romantic Alternative, plus, Unlimited Power and Command of her Minions. He refused and During their Battle, Dark-Blade's Body Changes into the Black Valrok, the Patron God of the Planet Skedaria, and the God-King of the Gods. The Dark Goddess had Gained a Lot of Power over the short time, so this made their battle a little Prolonged, she was a Powerful Evil Goddess indeed. But when it was Over, Dark-Blade Walks out of the Collapsing Temple with Garnet in his Arms. Nathan was killed by Dark-Blade because he was Corrupted by the Cultist's Sick Methods of Changing a Person Permanently. Although, he was given the Proper Rites and was laid to Rest by Garnet and the Tri-Marian People. Garnet later believes that she indebted to Dark-Blade and Joins his Team, being the 2nd-3rd member.

 

That little bit up there was about 1 of the Prologue Games that is Prior to this Game. But will be Included in the Character History Part of the EXTRAS. 1 of the Many, Many things you can Learn about the Characters, and their Past.

 

(I will Edit this some more, Later on.)

[Star_Dragon]

You say this is a Star Fox fanfic, but so far, I'm getting more of an impression that this is an RP. If that be the case, you've posted this in the wrong area, comrade.

[CrypticQuery]

This thread seems to be all over the place.  At one point it appears you're referring to a fan-character, and the other a [albeit hideously cliche] roleplay.  I think I want to put this in the RP section, but I don't know where - it isn't a request and it isn't specifically describing a character. 

[Dark-Blade]

This thread seems to be all over the place.  At one point it appears you're referring to a fan-character, and the other a [albeit hideously cliche] roleplay.  I think I want to put this in the RP section, but I don't know where - it isn't a request and it isn't specifically describing a character. 

Well, to be exact, friend. This is a Fan-Fiction GAME. Not an RP. I assure you. I was actually looking forward to Edit the Post some more. And to let you know, I had been slowly developing the Storyline, Characters, Weapons, Ships, Envionrments, Level Design, and so much more. But I obviously can't fit it all in one Post, can I?

[Xortberg]

Where oh where do I begin? Oh, I know. I'll start with this little gem:

 

But I obviously can't fit it all in one Post, can I?

 

Yes. Yes you probably can. The posts here either don't have a character limit, or what they do have is sizable enough that I've never gone over it, and I've constructed some towering walls of text in my time. But that's not the point. Even if you somehow did have enough material to have to split it up into multiple posts, you obviously haven't given us even a fraction of it to work with. What you have here isn't even a basic outline. I've written outlines for school papers, which I put a minimal amount of effort into in order to pass, that look like novels compared to what you've given us here.

 

All your paragraph gives us is a rambling "introduction" to your oh-so-special original character. I use quotation marks because you spend more time talking about the ore that makes his sword than you do talking about the character.

 

And about the character: What. Dark-Blade, the leader of Star-Blade? I'm not exactly gonna call into question the fact that his team - of which you've told us only about his sword, and none of the other members; I doubt they'll ever be of much importance from this little intro - since Star Fox and Star Wolf do it too. But I am gonna call into question his name. Dark-Blade is one of the most stereotypical "badass" names I've ever heard. I mean, it's no Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way, but I am incredibly leery of any character with 'Dark' in their name.

 

Names aside, why in the world would a character in a silly space shooter wear full plate armor and carry a longsword? I don't care how indestructible your Obsidian Damascus Ebony (lol) ore is, it's not gonna be any use in taking down a spaceship. In space. Unless that plate armor also has oxygen supplies, he's not even gonna get to use it in space, and literally anyone with a dinky little laser pistol and ten feet of distance is gonna have a serious upper hand in a battle on the surface. Unless Dark-Blade is a fucking Jedi, a gun is gonna be effective.

 

Now don't get me wrong; I'm not trying to dissuade you from writing. Even if this is all a bunch of poorly thought out, scattered concepts, that's okay. Everyone starts somewhere. I was no better when I first got interested in writing, and I'm nowhere near perfect now myself. But Jesus, if you're gonna post stuff for feedback, give us more than just a paragraph and a half saying "It's like Star Fox, but with my OC and his cool sword!"

 

That's not anything. That's not even a skeleton. It's not even a single bone, really. It's an idea. An idea that relies heavily on an already existing idea at that. And if you must post something like this - a barely substantial couple of sentences about how cool your super-special OC's sword is -

 

And to let you know, I had been slowly developing the Storyline, Characters, Weapons, Ships, Envionrments, Level Design, and so much more. 

 

do NOT turn around and say you have this much work done but were too lazy to post it. If you have this stuff and want feedback on it, post it. If you don't have this stuff, then really, you shouldn't post anything until you at least have a working outline of what the hell you want to do with your idea.

[CrypticQuery]

[Eloquently written, well thought out analysis]

 

[unoservix]

oh, this thread should end well

[Drasiana]

Hey, glad to see no mention of "EXTREME NUDITY" this time around, Dark-Blade. It's an improvement. I guess.

[Redeemer]

 

 

If you could stick to the rules, Dark-Blade, that would be great. You can keep all your stuff in this one topic, which will be your personal topic. Otherwise, feel free to share your ideas here and I look forward to seeing more from you. Welcome to SFO.

[Faisul]

He-heeey, it's Dark-Blade! Man, we had some fun times together, you should have a blast here, haha. Hang on, I just gotta go shoot myself in the head for a bit.

[Guest BlueRaccoon]

sroberson pretty much spelled it out.  I will add this and keep in mind it is just my own personal opinion:  Don't be like the people who do the Starfox games and give little to no explanation of how the characters are the way they are.  One reason I like the fanfiction here is because some of it at least attempts to explain something about the game or creates something or someone new with more substance.  Not trying to be mean.  It just sounds like another game everyone has already heard of.  You do seem to be having fun with this, though, and that's the important part.  Hope to see more soon.

Edited September 27, 2013 by BlueRaccoon