Son of Cloud [R]

[Guest Whirlpool]

*Psst* I'm a girl.

[Domino]

*Psst* I'm a girl.

....woops......ok still anwser the Q....LOL!

[Guest Whirlpool]

....woops......ok still anwser the Q....LOL!

Bah, sall right. 'lot of people end up doing that.

(A to Q) Sure, go ahead!

[Domino]

Bah, sall right. 'lot of people end up doing that.

Just add Fera/Fara....

(A to Q) Sure, go ahead!

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

Oh, hi. xD

I'm sorry I haven't updated this (on this site anyways) on here. D:

I'll stick up more chapters just for you, Whirlpool! Of course, they're going to get pretty crazy. (and yes, Fara is in the story, but much later on.) *in a robotic tone* Location confirmed, sending your chapters.

Er, is it okay, If I just post the link instead? I don't want to have to copy Chapters 9-36 (and it's still in progress as well! )

But, please post your comments on the story here. I don't wanna make you join another board to leave comments on a goofy fanfiction. xD

Chapters 9-36

[Guest Whirlpool]

First I just want to say: Holy crap, 36 chapters? That's long. And the review/comments are really just everything that came to mind. Not necessarily by the chapter, but you should get the general idea.  :thanks: (And I didn't get all the way through because my eyes were freaking out from staring at the screen like that for so long, but I'll finish up as much as I can tonight, and then the rest tomorrow.)

Ch9: He....ate her....and she ended up in a crystal..... Woah, that's an interesting digestive system. 

HEhehe....Eladard is kind of a funny word.  And so is "Venomese"

Dude, Star Wars moment! Only James doesn't really fit the Vader profile, but still.

Aw, the law gets in the way of yet another romance.

Mega-moodswing-o-rama!

Oh....poor Peppy..... And I just have to say, Lily and James? Omg, Fox has a brother! And his name is Harry! XD (Just ignore me, I make all sorts of weird references. I can relate my obsessions to just about everyting....

That must run in Falco's family. I love watching siblings interact with each other. They want to kill each other, but you know that they still love each other anyway.

*laughs hysterically at the scene about the "heirs"*

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

Well, you said you liked long stories, right? And this isn't even halfway done. though it's almost to the midpoint.

Also: What happened is that she got swallowed, and spat up, then she was somehow trapped inside the crystal, so... xD

And I never noticed that Fox's mom's name (I refuse to use the name Vixy) and his dad's name were the same as Harry Potter's until early 7th grade. I started this in 6th grade, and rewrote it 8 times. xD

And yes, we all must love the 'heirs' scene.  :wolf:

[Guest Whirlpool]

Yeah, I guess I got what I wanted. XD

Hmm...what happens when he "tosses his cookies" then?

"I'm not even married yet!" *insert evil Falco smirk here* :wolf:

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

heehee. :thanks:

And I'd explain exactly how he can spit stuff up without tossing his lunch as well, but it's kind of gross, so...

[Guest Whirlpool]

Oh, do tell. (Dun worry, I'm not one of them "weak-stomached" peoples)

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

Oh okay.

Basically, there's a second chamber in his stomach (this is supposed to occur naturally in male Eladardians), but it isn't connected to the main chamber. It's pretty much a little sepertated section without any acid in it, or anything leading out. Apparantly, the esophagus (did I spell that right?) can determent what is supposed to go where. This will also be demonstrated in a later chapter. I know it sounds gross, but this is what happens when you try to combine Japanese mythology with Star Fox. (or at least in my case! xD)

:krystal:

[Guest Whirlpool]

That's not as gross as you think it would be.

And now that brings up: How did he fit Krystal in there?  :krystal:

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

You might wanna re-read it. He turned into a REALLY big foxie. x3

And the rest of the story? (I recall you said that you finished the rest of the chapters) :3

:krystal:

[Guest Whirlpool]

OMG! HE KILLED VICTOR!

OMG! ROSCO'S GONNA DROWN!

OMG! James is evil. He so totally deserved that in the current end.

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

x3

Oh, but James isn't really 'evil'. He's just doing what he thinks is right, which apparantly involves declaring war on the whole system, and killing alot of people in the process. Not really the best procedure out there, though.

Alot more people in the story do die, but James doesn't actually kill as many people as another character does. Of course, this won't happen until they get to Katina, which will be in about 14 more chapters. I'm gonna try to wrap up Sauria as soon as possible. Don't worry, this is only the boring part.

Yes, I do have a crazy imagination.

:krystal:

[Guest Whirlpool]

Crazy? Oh, you're not crazy. Imagination is a good thing. People without that have nothing. Nothing I tell you!

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

Eh, maybe not, but this has to be one of the weirdest Star Fox 'fics ever created.

And since I probably won't update it until later this week, here's the backstory on where this came from ,and how it reached its final verion (as I stated earlier, I re-wrote it 8 times):

Originally, the story started out as a simplistic plot hole filler. It was really boring and really cheesy. Of course, this was back in 6th grade, and I wasn't much of a writer back then. They never even left Eladard, which at that point was going to be known as Diagan Rock. It was a combination of two older 'fics I had an idea of at the beginning of the year. The first, called 'The Cerberus Project', was pretty much a twisted little story about Fox becoming a mutant psyco fox thing. The other never got a name to it, but it involved something about Krystal ending up in a strange dimention, where Fox, and the other members of Star Fox (plus a few other characters) were these creepy demon things. I eventaully ditched both, but an idea came up one day, and I decided to stick with it.

So anyways, I decided to have them leave Eladard, and have the story wrap up on Corneria. Originally, they headed straight for Corneria, but after thnking it over, I decided it was illogical, and threw in a few other planets as well. So now, I liked some of the concepts, but it needed a much deeper plot. I was now well into 8th grade, and I had recently read some of my brother's old books. Also, even more inspiration came one night when I was bored, and randomly started reading Japanese myths on the 'net. I love how Nintendo can tie Japanese culture into their games without even taking away from the game. Thus, I decided to do the same. The Eladardians now were much like the nogitsune (fox demons) of Japanese lore. I also made a few other throwbacks, which will appear much later in the story as well. Eventually, after a while the final story came out as this.

I'm quite proud with the progress I've made so far, and I look forward to working on it again. Thanks for reading!

(sorry I wrote so much. this 'fic just has a long story behind it. xD)

:krystal:

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

UPDATE, YAY!

Chapter 37: Look To The Past

The Eladardians had left CloudRunner Palace, releasing the Queen as well. They had headed through yet another forest, and were now out relaxing at Cape Claw. Aquas was still treating her elder brother's wound, as he was too stubborn to follow his sister's instructions. "OW! Gods damnit, Aquas! Stop touching it!" James snarled, as he struggled to break away from the small blue-grey vixen. Aquas sighed and shook her head. "James, if you don't hold still it's going to hurt. Now stop squirming around so I can finish treating it!" While all of this was going on, Fox was lazily stretched out in the sand, his boots and shirt off. "...Fox?" The reinard's ears prick up. "Hm? Oh. Hey Krystal." He said, glancing up at her. She was now in her traditional Cerinian garb, and carried her staff at her side. She sat down next to Fox, her crystalline eyes staring out at the ocean. "It's too bad we can't just stay here. Sauria is so beautiful, and peaceful. It's much like Cerinia... Although I can't return unless it's neccisary. It's my duty to travel around and help people, and to learn as much as I can about Old Cerinia." Fox nodded. "I suppose so. Maybe someday, when this is all over, I can take you back."

~~~~~~

Alice was brushing her short blonde and purple dyed hair out, while looking over at Fara read her book. To the others, Fara was mostly an enigma, as she hardly ever spoke unless manditory, and otherwise remained silent, and kept her nose in one of her books. Thus, the rabbit decided to talk with the new recruit. "Hey Fara, whatcha reading?" She asked, sitting down next to the small cat. "Oh nothing. Just doing a bit of extra research on the Eladardians. Why, what do you need?" Fara replied. "I dunno. I just thought you could tell me something about Old Lylat. ...How did the Eladardains come to be so ruthless, anyways?" The feline seemed to beam at this question. "Then let me tell you..."

"...No one is sure when the actual people themselves came into a group, but legend has it that they get their visciousness from their creator. The tale takes place when Lylat was new. The cheif goddess of the Eladardians, Tayammo, was at discord with the others. She had apprantly tried to destroy one of the other gods, and thus, they decided to destroy her. They chased her across Lylat, and eventaully she had to transform herself into a stone to save herself from being killed. She stayed there for centuries, and anything that came to close to the stone died. Even birds flying overhead would suddenly drop dead out of the sky, their bodies shattering upon the rock. Eventually, a priest with a magical hammer, came and destroyed the rock, but before she vanished, Tayammo vowed that her decendants would be the greatest of all peoples in Lylat." Alice nodded. "Hm. I don't think this will probably have anything to do with that story, but I do know that these guys are a threat and we have to stop them." Fara nodded. "Yes. But listen Alice, the Eladardians are cakewalk, like the Nova Conspiracy was for you. You need to think before you act. It may cost you your life."

~~~~~~

James and Fox went ahead to investigate the Ocean Force Point Temple. Aquas insisted that James rest, and stay behind, but he didn't listen. Fox and his father were now sitting outside the temple, resting before they went into the temple. Fox was staring up at the starry sky, and then at the pillars, which were either broken, or scattered across the area. "Funny... I didn't know nature could fling pillars 8 feet away from their base. And I'm almost positive it wasn't caused by a storm either..." James gave a crafty grin. "Of course not. This was one of the sites for the greatest battles in history itself. Between Cerinia and Eladard. Most people today don't understand why Cerinia defended this place so much, but that's because they knew that in this temple, the Krazoa hid some of their greatest secrets. And that is why we must come here. It contains an important device for this operation, and even though the said device is here, it can only be used at Krazoa Palace. Thus, we must find it so that this part of the mission will be completed." Fox nodded. "But what exactly is it? Some kind of superweapon?" His father shook his head in response. "No. The Krazoans were peaceful, which is why they practically relied on Cerinia to protect it. They only fought out of defence, though. But this device allows one to tap into the mind of another, and to control that person to their will. The Krazoans created it, in hopes that they could use it to spread peace throughout the system, but they knew the danger it could be if it fell into the wrong person's hands. Andross spent years searching for the damn thing, but he never found it.

...However, I know how to find it."

[Guest Whirlpool]

Dun, dun DUUUUNNN.

James should read the Evil Over Lord list. He might learn a few things. :repost:

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

'Evil Overlord List'? What's that?

:repost:

[Guest Whirlpool]

It's this huge list of things you should never do if you're an evil overlord, and it covers all the flaws that they always have. For example :"My ventilation ducts will be too small to crawl through."

Here's the link.

http://www.eviloverlord.com/lists/overlord.html

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

xD!

I remeber my brother showing that to me. 'I will dress in bright and cheery colors'. xDDD

:krystal:

[Guest Whirlpool]

Yep. It'll definatly confuse not only the hero, but everyone else as well!

James shouldn't go seeking uber-powerful devices. Something bad will always come of it.

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

Perhaps, or perhaps not. The next chapter will probably tell. :3

:krystal:

[Guest Chiro-Chan]

*big gasp* LIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIVE!

Chapter 38: The Device

Fox and his father were ready to enter the temple, and were just about going to when a voice called out. "FOX!" The young reinard looked over his shoulder to see Krystal dashing up to him. "...Fox, if you go in there, then I want you to have this." She handed him a strange object. It was about the size of a small ball, and was floating, and glowing brighty. "It's a Cerinian Lantren. It never goes out, and always provides light." The vixen glanced at James for a moment before taking off again. "...She is nice, but I must admit, she is a bit of an odd one, that Krystal..." James murmured to himself, before shoving the stone walls open.

James pulled his sword out, as his ears cautiously flicked around. "Be careful. This place is probably filled with Guardians..." He said cautiously. His son glanced up, looking confused. "Dad, what's a-" He was cut off by a familliar sound. A strange, jelly-fish like creature came floating down from a ledge, and began to twirl, swinging its long tentacles at the two vulpines. James pushed Fox aside, and slashed off one of it's tentacles, blueish-purple blood splattering the ground and his sword. Fox drew his out as well, and gashed it across its 'head'. The creature screeched in pain, and vanished into the air, turning into blueish-purple smoke. "That" his father replied, "Was a Guardian. They're pesky creatures created by the Krazoa that live for thousands of years. They guard their temples and make sure no one can get into their artifacts." The two trekked on, James telling tales of the Krazoa and their great knowledge. "As wise as they were though, they were truely pathetic. They knew many things, but there were many other things they did not understand as well, and refused to understand." He explained, glancing at one of the pillars of water. "Though one must admit that their creations are quite amazing."

The two had entered a room, when the stone doors had rolled shut. "Ah, one of their tests." James said, a grin stretching across his face. "You see, when Andross sent his troops in, not one of them could solve any of the puzzles, so they had to turn back. I believe in this one, we must do something with that flame." He said, and pointed to a fire burning on a pedestal. Every once and a while, it would change its color. Fox grinned. "There's bound to be a lantren around here somewhere. Andross' troops must have been idiots." Soon, a green and blue lantren had been lit, and the door had opened.

After four other puzzles, the final door had opened, and within lay the device. The two walked over, carefully staring down at it. It appeared to be a large seashell in shape, but made from a steely golden metal with odd blue buttons set into it. Fox reached out to pick it up, but James grabbed his paw. "It's probably booby trapped. We need something to replace it with." He looked around, when he saw Fox hold up a rock. "That's perfect. Now then..." He pressed his paw down onto the plate, and slid the device off into a bag, and quickly replaced it with a rock. Soon the two were out again, now with the device in hand.

Chapter 39: Katina

It was late at night, and all seemed to be peaceful, until a seashell shaped object smashed against a wall, and shattered. "!MALDITO!" James stormed down the hallway, recollecting on the last mission. They had just arrived at Krazoa Palace, and to the vulpine's shock, the device was no longer able to opporate. They quickly returned to the camp at ThornTail Hollow and left Sauria, with James in a rage. Fox only watched as his father stormed over to his chair in the control room, swearing under his breath. "Godsdamn thing won't work. Those damn monkies probably did something to make in useless..."

The Wyvern quickly sped towards Katina, as James drummed his claws on his chair. "Are those damn idiots following us still?" He questioned without looking up at Zephry. "Affirmetive, sir. I think they're trying to send through a warning to Katina, but I managed to patch through an interferance." "Excellent. Best we scramble the fighters as soon as we break through airspace. The KDF is going to be suspicious..." As he said this, he got up, and lingered over to the 'Scramble Alert' button, and watched out the windows. In his head, the reinard counted down. 5, 4, 3, 2... 1 James smashed the button down, and soon the hallways were filled with Eladardians heading for their fighters. As he leaped into his own fighter The Excaliber, a grin stretched across his face. It's been far too long since I last flew...

The fighters flashed through the sky as the bigger warship went to find a landing spot. Fox's Arwing was towards the front of the pack when a message flashed onto the screen. "PILOTS. IDENTIFY YOURSELVES, OR WE WILL COMMENCE FIRE." Captain Bill Grey's face appeared as he barked into his mike. Fox smiled and returned the message. "Hello Grey, it's been a while. And don't expect us to listen either. Katina and the rest of Lylat belong to the people of Eladard now." Bill's fur rose up as he saw Fox's face on the screen. "My gods... Fox?!"

Chapter 40: Flame over Grass

The sky of Katina whirred with the sound of fighters, and within a few moments, the explosion of Katinan fighters filled the air. A smile stretched across Fox's face, as he ripped through four fighters, and took off after another. "Fox?! what are you doing?!" Bill screamed over the COM, but his freind ignored him, and blasted at another. The canine clenched his fists. "Oh, I hate to do this to you but..." He took after Fox, nearly ripping off the left wing on his Arwing. The Arwing whipped around. "Damn you, Grey! I'll kill you!" The vulpine threw his thrusters on, and headed straight at the Greenie II. "You're insane!" The canid pulled back on his controls, and barely managed to fly over the Arwing. Fox pulled a U-turn, and was hot on Bill's tail. "No!" The canine made a desperate attempt to shake off his pursuer, but it was no use. "C'mon! Someone get into weave formation with me!" He cried over the COM, but the others were busy trying to shake off their pursuers. It was no use. Fox shredded Bill's wings off, and watched as he plummeted to the ground. "I always was the better pilot." He sneered, as he saw the ship's cockpit pop out, and manage to slide away from the hull, which was now only a flaming wreck.

Bill clambered out of his cockpit, and looked to see every fighter from the base had been downed. "Oh my gods..." He leaped out, and looked up to see the Eladardians fly overhead, most only barely nicked. What the hell?! They're all alive... and I barely made it out... And Fox... He shook his head and ran over to the wrecks. He stared down in horror to find all of his fellow pilots dead, whether they had been knocked unconcionce, and died in a crash, or having crashed into the base below. "Oh my gods... What the hell is going on?" He sat down, and silently mourned for his comrads.

Elsewhere, the Eladardians had set up camp as the sun began to set over the plains. "Gods, did you see those idiots? Who taught them to fly, a toilet paper roll?" Fox joked, jabbing Blake in the stomach, who in turn, pushed him. "My kid brother, Dwiezel could beat them in a dogfight. And he's only 5!" The two walked off, laughing. James merly glanced over at them, shaking his head slightly, and then turned back to the fire he sat in front of. "I don't see why they defend Katina so much. Though I do suppose they grow most of Corneria's food here. As long as we can cut it off from Corneria, we'll be in a good position for attacking." Derrikk, who was sitting next to him gave a slight nod, but said nothing. As he continued to speak, Zephry came over. "Sir?" James looked over? "Hm? What is it?" "Sir, the girl is missing. She was abducted by the Katinans. Blake tried to stop them, but he was knocked unconcionce by one of them." James' hair rose up. "Oh gods, Fox isn't going to be happy. I'll go get him. Make sure no one else goes, I don't want anyone getting suspicious." He got up, and headed into the ship, and down the hall in which Fox had dissapeared down.