foxbird22 Posted July 31, 2007 Share Posted July 31, 2007 Hey everybody. Here's my current story, which is a stand-alone prologue to my in-progress story, A Collision of Worlds. Hope you like it! Note that it's still in progress, and chapter three will be coming soon. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3295655/1/Sudden_Invasion Summary: Two surveillance crews discover shocking information, mysteriously appearing at the same time. Will the reformation of a long ago destroyed planet and the invasion of a powerful enemy cripple the Lylat System, or become the beginning of an epic adventure? Characters (in order of appearance): Weston Promple (OC) Krystal Wolf O'Donnell Tray Gorgeon (OC) Commander Atreyu (OC) This is just a prologue to my real story, so expect there to be lots of questions! WARNING: Mild language and graphic description. Enjoy, and please let me know what you think! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ARWINGCOMMANDER 3987 Posted November 14, 2007 Share Posted November 14, 2007 Great start to the story. Keep making new chapters! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
foxbird22 Posted November 15, 2007 Author Share Posted November 15, 2007 Thanks, I will! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Four-eyed Vulpine Posted November 15, 2007 Share Posted November 15, 2007 Like always, excellent writing. I only have enough time to skim, right now, but I'll be sure to read it again in depth later. Also, might I advise you to combine your Author's Notes with respective chapters. (Beginning notes with the first chapter, and the last chapter with Final notes.) I believe the site has a rule prohibiting author's notes as stand-alone chapters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
foxbird22 Posted November 15, 2007 Author Share Posted November 15, 2007 The administrators on FanFiction.net obviously don't care very much. I'm not technically supposed to write a story with lyrics to a copyrighted song, either. You can tell me you told me so if they complain about it. :wink: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ARWINGCOMMANDER 3987 Posted November 15, 2007 Share Posted November 15, 2007 The planet your story describes has gotta be Cerinia. Where else could it be? Great story. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
foxbird22 Posted November 15, 2007 Author Share Posted November 15, 2007 You seem pretty sure about that. The next chapter will be out sometime next week, providing college doesn't get in the way (again). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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