richie86 Posted January 28, 2011 Share Posted January 28, 2011 Character: richie K-nineSpecies: WolfSpecialty's: fighting,planing,helping others,sneaky,fast,sensesTraits: friendly,helpful,quiet,looks out for othersOther: he's the guy that when you walk by you look back and he keeps walking but he knows your watching himage: 17hair: black with a little white under chin and pawsfamily: died in warhome: desertsex: male Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fluxy Posted January 28, 2011 Share Posted January 28, 2011 Huh... A very, very basic character. You don't have to add details, I guess, but is there more you could tell? Because right now, this just seems like an outline.Welcome to SFO, btw. Check out some other character profiles made by other users to get an idea of what to shoot for. =] You will have great detailed characters in no time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
richie86 Posted January 28, 2011 Author Share Posted January 28, 2011 Character: richie K-nineSpecies: WolfSpecialty's: fighting,planing,helping others,sneaky,fast,sensesTraits: friendly,helpful,quiet,looks out for othersOther: he's the guy that when you walk by you look back and he keeps walking but he knows your watching himage: 17hair: black with a little white under chin and pawsfamily: died in warhome: desertsex: malePreferred weapon: sword:skills:Havoc flame: rushes at opponent grabs him and throws in the air and unleashes a barrage of attack in the air ending with a fiery Blow sending them back to the ground Up roaring Shadow: dashes around opponent a few time before attacking with a slash so powerful your enemy goes temporally blind Fist:skills:Dragon uppercut: hit the floor with an power blow hitting the enemy in the air then hitting in the stomach and finally uppercuts the enemyFist: ULTIMATE MOVE:TEN THOUSAND FIST OF HELL: A very power full move creating a giant aura sphere around the enemy hitting them with a thousand blows than finally kicking the sphere to a wall and explodes backstory: when child a gang of androsses warriors attack his village and he was inplanted with flame power from an failed experament when the attacked happend he was knocked out and when he woke up he was on a bed in the hospital after that day of seeing all of his people died he swore to practice every day till strong enough to avenge his people. practiceing his fire gift from the experament. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Shaper Posted January 28, 2011 Share Posted January 28, 2011 I don't think a 17 year old is capable of such power. Especially as they don't have a backstory to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
richie86 Posted January 28, 2011 Author Share Posted January 28, 2011 don't be hating this just a post you use your imagination :oops: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Shaper Posted January 28, 2011 Share Posted January 28, 2011 don't be hating this just a post you use your imagination I wasn't hating I was offering criticism. Basically it should be a little more realistic then you make it out to be. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
richie86 Posted January 28, 2011 Author Share Posted January 28, 2011 im sorry im new new and i was just coming up with ideas :( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Shaper Posted January 28, 2011 Share Posted January 28, 2011 im sorry im new new and i was just coming up with ideas I'm not saying your character is terrible or even less then average but it's better to have a back story with explanation then just saying he is powerful. They have potential but they need to be a little more 3 dimensional. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
richie86 Posted January 28, 2011 Author Share Posted January 28, 2011 :wink:better? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Shaper Posted January 28, 2011 Share Posted January 28, 2011 :wink:better?Your getting there but the way he got his powers isn't altogether original anymore, and I still think you stress his abilities a little to far, either he is still training and isn't a master of his powers yet, or he has been training since a young age. Personally the first choice would make more sense. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fluxy Posted January 28, 2011 Share Posted January 28, 2011 I really do think looking at other's sheets to get examples of what is good will definitely help. Give the character realistic features, physical descriptions, family, friends, a profession, dream, weaknesses, all these contribute to a great character.It takes time to fine tune things, and have plenty of room for improvement. Take this as a great opportunity to see and expand on areas you feel are lacking. =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
richie86 Posted January 30, 2011 Author Share Posted January 30, 2011 well not to be mean but the back story said when he was a child so yes he did start training as a child Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Shaper Posted January 30, 2011 Share Posted January 30, 2011 well not to be mean but the back story said when he was a child so yes he did start training as a childShouldn't there be more in between his backstory then? No one's asking for a fanfiction but at least a sizable paragraph. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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