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Character: richie  K-nine

Species: Wolf

Specialty's:  fighting,planing,helping others,sneaky,fast,senses

Traits: friendly,helpful,quiet,looks out for others

Other: he's the guy that when you walk by you look back and he keeps walking but he knows your watching him

age: 17

hair: black with a little white under chin and paws

family: died in war

home: desert

sex: male

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Huh... A very, very basic character. You don't have to add details, I guess, but is there more you could tell? Because right now, this just seems like an outline.

Welcome to SFO, btw. Check out some other character profiles made by other users to get an idea of what to shoot for. =] You will have great detailed characters in no time.

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Character: richie  K-nine

Species: Wolf

Specialty's:  fighting,planing,helping others,sneaky,fast,senses

Traits: friendly,helpful,quiet,looks out for others

Other: he's the guy that when you walk by you look back and he keeps walking but he knows your watching him

age: 17

hair: black with a little white under chin and paws

family: died in war

home: desert

sex: male

Preferred weapon:

sword:skills:

Havoc flame: rushes  at opponent  grabs him and throws in the air and unleashes a barrage of attack in the air ending with a fiery Blow sending them back to the ground

Up roaring Shadow: dashes around opponent a few time before attacking with a slash so powerful your enemy goes temporally blind

Fist:skills:

Dragon uppercut: hit the floor with an power blow hitting the enemy in the air then hitting in the stomach  and finally uppercuts the enemy

Fist: ULTIMATE MOVE:

TEN THOUSAND FIST OF HELL:  A very power full move creating a giant aura sphere around the enemy hitting them with a thousand blows than finally kicking the sphere to a wall and explodes :shock:

backstory: when child a gang of androsses warriors attack his village and he was inplanted with flame power from an failed experament when the attacked happend he was knocked out and when he woke up he was on a bed in the hospital after that day of seeing all of his people died he swore to practice every day till strong enough to avenge his people. practiceing his fire gift from the experament.

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I don't think a 17 year old is capable of such power. Especially as they don't have a backstory to it.

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don't be hating this just a post you use your imagination :oops:

I wasn't hating I was offering criticism. Basically it should be a little more realistic then you make it out to be.
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im sorry im new new and i was just coming up with ideas  :(

I'm not saying your character is terrible or even less then average but it's better to have a back story with explanation then just saying he is powerful. They have potential but they need to be a little more 3 dimensional.
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:wink:better?

Your getting there but the way he got his powers isn't altogether original anymore, and I still think you stress his abilities a little to far, either he is still training and isn't a master of his powers yet, or he has been training since a young age. Personally the first choice would make more sense.
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I really do think looking at other's sheets to get examples of what is good will definitely help. Give the character realistic features, physical descriptions, family, friends, a profession, dream, weaknesses, all these contribute to a great character.

It takes time to fine tune things, and have plenty of room for improvement. Take this as a great opportunity to see and expand on areas you feel are lacking. =]

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well not to be mean but the back story said when he was a  child so yes he did start training as a child

Shouldn't there be more in between his backstory then? No one's asking for a fanfiction but at least a sizable paragraph.
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