XG Fox Posted June 29, 2005 Share Posted June 29, 2005 Well, not only are you good, you're FAST!!! I just gave you the idea for the Krystal one TODAY, and look how LONG it turned out! Mine (if you read it, it's under XG's Stuff) isn't near as long, and took me a good hour at least... dang... you're really quick. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted June 29, 2005 Share Posted June 29, 2005 Once I get writing, it just keeps on coming out. It just seems to be something that I can do, really. Just one of those things I have a knack for. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted June 29, 2005 Share Posted June 29, 2005 Alright, I've finished up my request for Lord_Korvis. I hope you like it! The Plight of Aheros One false move. In the midst of a raging battle, All it took was One false move, And suddenly He was no longer out there with his comrades, Fighting the enemy. He was lying on a medical table, With only the sounds of medical instruments, His own screams, And his pain To keep him company. He screamed as they removed The mangled heap that was his legs. He screamed as they tore off The crumpled limb of his right arm. He screamed as they amputated The clump that was a left claw. And he screamed when they Plucked out his left eye, Peeled open the skin on his head, And proceeded to systematically Remove his skull. The screaming finally stopped When they removed The remains of his lungs, Prohibiting that breath That fueled his screams. In the place of all this mangled And disfigured flesh, They made him a machine. Crushing legs, A powerful arm, A claw of death, A focused eye, And a thick, protective skull. In the place of his lungs, The placed machinery that Would keep him breathing No matter what the situation. And as they connected all of his circuitry For the first time, And he rose from the medical table, Observing his new, mechanical form, It was realized that he was changed More than physically. A fiery light shone in his organic eye, The aura about him called for revenge. And in that moment, he was no longer Simply Captain Aheros. He became The Silencing Machine. And with no more delay, He walked, With his mechanical legs, To the Command Deck, Was made a General, And proceeded to gain control Of the Separatist Armada Or so he thought. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Lord_Korvis Posted June 30, 2005 Share Posted June 30, 2005 Very Tragic. Very good. Thank YoU!" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Loner in the Stars Posted June 30, 2005 Share Posted June 30, 2005 One word... WOW Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted June 30, 2005 Share Posted June 30, 2005 Holy s---... that's AWESOME! You and Gamecuber should write a book... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted June 30, 2005 Share Posted June 30, 2005 haha, thanks guys, I appreciate the comments and everything. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Lord_Korvis Posted June 30, 2005 Share Posted June 30, 2005 You deserve them. It is a very good poem... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted July 1, 2005 Share Posted July 1, 2005 Well, thank you, Lord_Korvis, I'm quite glad that you liked it. Alright, this next poem...well, I was in the mood for a good, tough poem that required some thought, so I got this idea. I hope you all enjoy! Ninja They creep like shadows Behind their unsuspecting victim. A flash of lighting, A breath of wind, And their existence Is unknown Once more. In a burst of elemental power, Their victim is slain, And they are invisible again. They are the shadow of the sky, The footprints of the wind, The embodiment of the night. As if a river of water, They flow throughout where they travel. They float as does A moth in the moonlight, Yet strike as does A tiger springing towards its prey. In one quick strike, Their goal is achieved, And they are gone, Unseen by the world. They creep towards Their next quarry, Their unsuspecting prey. And in another quick strike, Another member of their Pack of dishonor Ceases to exist. Throughout the night, It continues. One flash here, One strike there. One by one, Their enemies Are cut down. The sun rises to find The red blood of their enemies Splattering the walls of their domain, Much like the red sky itself. The shadows of the night Fly back to their village, Satisfied with the nights work, And pleased that they may sleep In peace. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EvolutionSFox Posted July 1, 2005 Share Posted July 1, 2005 Holy s---... that's AWESOME! You and Gamecuber should write a book... No joke... Great job... KL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted July 1, 2005 Share Posted July 1, 2005 Thanks, ESF. This one really took me some thought, too. But, like I said, I was in the mood to write something a bit challenging, so I went with that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Loner in the Stars Posted July 1, 2005 Share Posted July 1, 2005 I envy your writing skills! I'm kidding, but you do have great writing skills. Keep up the good work KL! :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted July 1, 2005 Share Posted July 1, 2005 :oops: Thanks, everyone. I'm glad I can provide some good stuff for you all to read. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jam Posted July 1, 2005 Share Posted July 1, 2005 I am.... socked I got one word to discribe this work masterpice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted July 1, 2005 Share Posted July 1, 2005 Haha, wow, thanks, jam. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XG Fox Posted July 1, 2005 Share Posted July 1, 2005 Holy s---... that's AWESOME! You and Gamecuber should write a book... ^ What I said earlier... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted July 11, 2005 Share Posted July 11, 2005 Here's another poem I've written. It's about another of Lord_Korvis' RP characters. The Quest of Korvis Your time has come. No longer must you Hide in the shadows, Waiting for the time to strike. Your race was once The most powerful force in Lylat. But then, it came. The plague. Harmful to your race only, It swept through Lylat Like a wildfire, Destroying all of those Proud and majestic beings In its path. Soon, it was only you And two others. You watched As those other two Died before your eyes. And just as the plague Reached you, And you began To feel your life slip away, It stopped. Somehow, some way, You stopped the plague But too late. You were alone. The only Sithari left In all of Lylat. So you waited. For hundreds of years, You hid in the shadows, Slowly getting world after world To join your cause. And now, Your time has come. At the head of the Separatist Armada, You take Lylat by storm. World after world will fall, And soon, the Sithari Shall rule once again. The age of Lylat Is over. The time of the Sithari Has come. And all will fear your name. Lord Korvis. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Panther Caruso Posted July 11, 2005 Share Posted July 11, 2005 Im not a poetry fan but... wow that was really good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EvolutionSFox Posted July 11, 2005 Share Posted July 11, 2005 Im not a poetry fan but... wow that was really good Ditto, very good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Krystal's_Lover Posted July 11, 2005 Share Posted July 11, 2005 :roll: Thanks, guys, I'm glad you like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Wolfen Master Posted July 24, 2005 Share Posted July 24, 2005 awseome have you ever heard this one? peas on my head,but dont call me a pea head beees on my head, but dont call me a bee head bruce lees on my head, but dont call me a lee head please excuse me i gotta get my tree fed you wear designer brands,but i make my own clothing i hang out with an apple that loves self-lothing pancakes on my face it makes me extra happy i like shampoo bottles that sit on my lappy when life hands me lemons i make beef stew now its time for me to rock it put bolonie in my left pocket smear cream cheese in my gold locket! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Satoshi Posted July 24, 2005 Share Posted July 24, 2005 Nice poetry man, very emotional and inspirational. I felt somethin' when I was reading, and that's hard to do with me. I can't write so don't expect any pointers from me XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Wolfen Master Posted July 24, 2005 Share Posted July 24, 2005 i think kl is good too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Panther Caruso Posted July 24, 2005 Share Posted July 24, 2005 You could sell your poetry for a high price... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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