Infinity Posted May 31, 2006 Share Posted May 31, 2006 http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/34316730/ Just need the music and I'm slapping it on YTMND. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kal Posted May 31, 2006 Share Posted May 31, 2006 Look, up in the sky! It's a bird! It's a plane! No, it's Super-critical! Work on her form and body shape. She's a bit too wide at her thighs. The arms are alright (normally, I rag on the arms, but not terribly much this time). There's...something minor about them, but I can't put my finger on it. The staff seems much shorter than it is. It may be the perspective, but I say make it longer. Ears need to be a little shorter and more rounded. They look like Fox's right now. I like the face. Her muzzle's about the right size. A little too big IMO, but I like small muzzles. It's pretty close to her actual one. ...What, you said "go nuts." It's got a lot of potential, just a few minor molehill tweaks that I'm making into mountains. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted May 31, 2006 Author Share Posted May 31, 2006 Heh thank you for critquing. I like short muzzles too, but I wanted to stay true to the game. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TakeWalker Posted June 1, 2006 Share Posted June 1, 2006 YTMND? Why? Those people will eat you alive. Or ignore you, either way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted June 1, 2006 Author Share Posted June 1, 2006 Because the other one on there is just so appaling that I'm motivated to work 20 or so hours to properly represent this fanbase. I'm kinda big on honor and someone posting one of Comet's more nsfw works up there for people to see is just appaling and it looks like I forgot her tail too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kal Posted June 1, 2006 Share Posted June 1, 2006 ...All my super critical-ness and I didn't notice that...*seppuku* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Krystal Posted June 1, 2006 Share Posted June 1, 2006 Good luck, it is possible to have good overcome in a YTMND. Mine went over well: http://krystalnuma.ytmnd.com/ I don't think I could review her any better than Kal did. Good job actually, just keep working. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted June 1, 2006 Author Share Posted June 1, 2006 I've probably put in a good 6-8 hours just on this so far, there's bound to be something wrong with the linework and I always do eyes last. I suck at drawing technology, anyway. Go on a critiquing spree, please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blaz3 Posted June 1, 2006 Share Posted June 1, 2006 I was going to say that there wasn't any eyes and it scared me but I see above you haven't done those yet. I think that this is one of the best fanarts I have ever seen!! My only criticism is that the arms are a little thick on the forearm and the staff is a liiiiiiiiiitle too thick and a liiiiiiiitle too short. Its awesome though, good luck in sending it to YTMND! l EDIT: seeing it again and reading Kal's criticism, the ears could be a bit smaller but maybe its just because of reading Kal's post. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted June 1, 2006 Author Share Posted June 1, 2006 I was going to say that there wasn't any eyes and it scared me but I see above you haven't done those yet. I think that this is one of the best fanarts I have ever seen!! My only criticism is that the arms are a little thick on the forearm and the staff is a liiiiiiiiiitle too thick and a liiiiiiiitle too short. Its awesome though' date=' good luck in sending it to YTMND![/quote'] One of the best you've ever seen? Heh, it's probably far from that. I've been drawing for a bit over eight months, I'm not that good. I can't really fix the thickness of the staff without really messing with the lineart, since the lines cross through her body a lot. I can fix the arm and the staff length easily though. Thansk for the critiques! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Fox Posted June 1, 2006 Share Posted June 1, 2006 It's nice, coloring will help it alot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Krystal Posted June 1, 2006 Share Posted June 1, 2006 I would recommend turning that line that differenciates the muzzle from the face in to a shaded area, since, in real life, it wouldn't be a hard line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Mithos Kionisu Posted June 1, 2006 Share Posted June 1, 2006 Eyes need pupils Cheeks need to be less rounded, especially the right cheek (left from our perspective) Muzzle needs to protrude alittle further Neck needs to be alittle thiner Broaden the shoulders The arms look like noodles Make the finger joints more prnounced Add breasts, most women over 20 have them Feet are positioned unaturaly, looks like shes standing on the tips of her toes Fix the background, the angle is way too steep Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted June 2, 2006 Author Share Posted June 2, 2006 Eyes need pupils Cheeks need to be less rounded, especially the right cheek (left from our perspective) Muzzle needs to protrude alittle further Neck needs to be alittle thiner Broaden the shoulders The arms look like noodles Make the finger joints more prnounced Add breasts, most women over 20 have them Feet are positioned unaturaly, looks like shes standing on the tips of her toes Fix the background, the angle is way too steep Not sure how to pronounce her finger joints too much more, but I'll give it a shot. Didn't know what to do with her feet with the sketch... She ran on the tips of her toes in Assault anyway. Silliness aside I'll try to fix that. I always struggle when drawing breats, I don't know how to really uh bring them out. Shoulders, cheeks, and arms should be easy to fix. That's quite a critique... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blaz3 Posted June 2, 2006 Share Posted June 2, 2006 Yeah, if you do those, it'll look great!!! And seriously and honestly, I think it is one of the best I've ever seen, I'm not just saying that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted June 3, 2006 Author Share Posted June 3, 2006 Well I decided not to fix the length of the staff because it would lose the touch of my style a bit and I'm lazy. If luck holds it'll be done tonight, but it's a lot to color. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Krystal Posted June 3, 2006 Share Posted June 3, 2006 Sweet! Can't wait! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kal Posted June 3, 2006 Share Posted June 3, 2006 I'm meh over the shorter staff. On one hand, it doesn't look right to me; on the other, your call. I just noticed, though. The head of the staff is really lopsided. It looks like it's bending forward. Probably too late, but whatever. I love being a critic too much to pass it up. :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted June 3, 2006 Author Share Posted June 3, 2006 Heh check the first page. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kal Posted June 3, 2006 Share Posted June 3, 2006 Lengthwise, yes. The tip, no. Time to be a nice critic: Very nice blending for her face. I like it, and I like the background. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted June 3, 2006 Author Share Posted June 3, 2006 Just think of it as slightly tilited... ah ok I'll stop making excuses. It's too late to fix that now anyway... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kal Posted June 3, 2006 Share Posted June 3, 2006 Yeah, good point. Still, it gives me a reason to whine and moan. It gives me purpose. :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Krystal Posted June 3, 2006 Share Posted June 3, 2006 Ha ha ha, I think it's coming along nicely. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blaz3 Posted June 4, 2006 Share Posted June 4, 2006 Looks great so far! Keep it up, the staff actually looks good at its length. Keep colouring, as a little critique, I think some expression on her face could be good, either a frown or a smile, the straight mouth looks not too great, and aren't you going to make it a newcomer Krystal pic? If you are, remember to make the newcomer banner at the bottom of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Infinity Posted June 4, 2006 Author Share Posted June 4, 2006 She's usually the calm one of the team, so I thought that the rather distant, calm look would suit her well and I already screwed up on the shading, so i have to fix that of course. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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